Our Final: writing an essay about a summary of what we’ve done this semester: What do journalists do, and why?
**Print out hard copy of Ride Along for next tuesday!
Notes:
First Piece: Essential Oils – Casey
- headline shouldn’t be too academic – “sexier”
- quotes; descriptive language
- If writing about Iowa, do not need to say (city), Iowa
- 8-year, three-month
- Don’t repeat yourself
- all quotes need to be on new lines (new paragraph)
- “receive” is a bland word
- new thought = new line
- quotes: reader should know who is talking right away
- end on good strong quotes
Second: Speech Tournament – Bri
- video should enhance narrative – take a sentence or 2 from the videos to use for direct quotes
- reader shouldn’t have to do the work for you
- attribution for quotes is important
- more formal story – no anticipation; less descriptive
- still good though
- Disclaimer and Update good
- Wanted to know more about his life
Third: Trevor – Surf Ballroom
- North Central is capitalized
- put it in the present
- lead into quotes
- job titles are lower cased
- patient and thorough
- # of people who have been there?
- do a voiceover on the video
Fourth: Annette – Humane Society
- Don’t include local in the beginning
- don’t use word receive
- don’t overuse “offered”
Fifth: Sydney – Where does your milk come from?
- questions in headlines are rarely used, but it works in this case
- run-on sentences
- info is meaningful
- should have talked to Mikayla’s parents/family
- painted her in a good light
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